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Band 2

In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Now days
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Nowadays
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, every desired food product can be bought from local
super markets
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supermarkets
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;
while
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 most of them are
preduced
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produced
in
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apply
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overseas and transported to local shops. I believe
this
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 trend is vice, owing to its inevitable need to
complicated
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complicate
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transportation
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the transportation
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 process,
that
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which
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 not only can not provide great gastronomic pleasure for consumers, but
also
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 tends to
rising
Verb problem
exacerbate
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climate
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the climate
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 change crisis
actively
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apply
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. Turning to the quality and taste of imported food products, since they
bare
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bear
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far
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a far
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 distance
traveling
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travelling
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, in some cases from one continent to another
one
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apply
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, they are sorted, selected, and
processing
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processed
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 in order to capability of walking through
this
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 phase, not based on their taste or flavour. For
instant
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instance
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, more resistant fruits are selected to export which have good
appearence
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appearance
, but no
grate
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great
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 flavour.
Furthermore
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, exporting food products is associated with
long
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a long
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 and
vulnarable
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vulnerable
transporting
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transportation
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 process,
that
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which
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 in turn
lead
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leads
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 to dramatic carbon
emission
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emissions
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. In some
cases
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cases,
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 merchants need to transfer

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structure
Make a short intro that states your view clearly. Then give 2-3 reasons with simple examples. End with a short conclusion.
coherence
Keep ideas in separate paragraphs. Begin each with a topic sentence and link ideas with simple words like 'and', 'but', 'also'.
grammar
Fix spelling and grammar. Check words like 'now days' (nowadays), 'preduced' (produced), 'vulnarable' (vulnerable). Use simple, correct forms.
content
Add real examples from life to back your points, for instance how transport from other countries can raise carbon, or how local food can be cheaper or faster.
structure
Use clear linking words to show the flow of ideas, such as 'First', 'However', 'In addition', 'For example'.
style
Keep sentences short and simple. Do not use long, complex words. This helps the reader follow your idea.
strength
Your view is clear: you think buying food from far away can be bad for climate.
strength
You raise a real issue about how transport and climate are linked.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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