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The table gives information about monthly expenditure of people on various services.

The table gives information about monthly expenditure of people on various services.
The table compares the monthly expenditure of people in Australia on six different categories of
goods
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 and services for the years 1991 and 2001.
Overall
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, rates of Australia's other
goods
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 and
goods
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 quickly increased,
while
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 there was mixed success for similar
goods
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, and the leading expenditure in the table had significantly higher
sales
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 than the rest.
Sales
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 of other
goods
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 were relatively modest in 1991, and it was the largest consumer with 250$ in
sales
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. Despite
this
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 figure steadily increasing in 2001, the food rapidly rose from third place ( with 155$) to lead the table with 160$ worth of
sales
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 in the same year. The clothing and transport saw a similar slight decrease in
this
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 category, just 10 - 15 times in 1991 figures to reach 20$ and 40$ respectively.
In contrast
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, housing experienced
gradual
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a gradual
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 climb in
sales
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, with the 2001 figures ( 95$ to 100$).

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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