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The table gives information about monthly expenditure of people on various services.

The table gives information about monthly expenditure of people on various services.
The given table provides information about how the monthly expenditure of people on various
services
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 changed between 1991 and 2001.
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,
it is clear that
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 spending on
services
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 increased over the
period
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, albeit to varying
degress
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degrees
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Moreover
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 only two categories experienced a decline. Spending on other goods and
services
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 remained the highest among all categories, rising from 675 to 715 Australian dollars per month. Food expenditure
also
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 grew slightly, increasing from just 155 to 165.
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, housing and utility bills (electricity and water) costs climbed noticeably, from 95 to 100 and from 75 to 120 , respectively , over the
period
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, only two categories witnessed a decline during the
period
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. The amount of money spent on clothing dropped from just 30 to 20 Australian dollars per month, which represented the sharpest fall among all
services
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.
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, the expenditure on transportation
services
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 fell significantly from 70 to 45, with the most noticeable decline occurring over the decade. Meanwhile, spending on all other
services
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 increased throughout the
period
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words services, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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