Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. Others believe the students should spend their whole school da on academics. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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physical is important to maintain. It will make the student

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when studying, to boost mood and energy and

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teamwork. There are two opinions about

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Oct 13, 2025

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structure

Your essay is short and has many grammar errors. Try to add a clear intro that says the topic and your plan. End with a short conclusion that has your view.

coherence

Make the text clearer by using simple link words. Use words like first, next, then, but, also.

grammar

Improve grammar and word use. Check parts like 'is', 'are', and article use. For example: 'Physical exercise is important for students' instead of 'The student physical is important to maintain.'

content

Give reasons for each view and give a small example, even a simple one, to back up your idea.

strength

You mention both sides of the topic, which shows you understand the task.

Fully explain your ideas

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

101 words

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Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. Others believe the students should spend their whole school da on academics. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

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Many people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subject. But others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are good at or they find the most interest. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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