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Band 2

Look at the pictures, which show the process of making cherry jam. Complete the sentences with a verb from the box in the correct form.

The illustrations given depict the process of making cherry jam
on
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at
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 each stage. The procedure involves nine main stages, beginning with collecting berries and ending with
jars
Correct word choice
labelling jars
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labeling
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apply
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.
Initially
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, people shook a tree and collected cherries.
Then
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, fruits are transported by
track
Correct article usage
a track
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 to a conveyor belt in order to separate them from spoiled berries. Having been separated, they undergo a purification process. After being
washed
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washed,
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 each fruit goes through a metal spine, which extrudes
cherry
Correct article usage
the cherry
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 stone. Once all the berries are prepared, the heating process of creating a jam begins. Sugar
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along
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, along
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 with pectin and lemon juice added to the substance and heated to make it consistent.
The next step is
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 an integral part of product making - the quality check. A man testing the texture, combination of flavours and smell to make sure it is ready to be packed. Ultimately, the final product is filled into jars, covered
by
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with
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lid
Correct article usage
a lid
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 and
sticked
Verb problem
stickered
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 with
label
Correct article usage
a label
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.

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grammar
Fix tense and form. Use 'are added', 'are washed', 'is heated'.
coherence
Keep the flow with order words like 'first', 'next', 'then', 'finally' to link steps.
grammar
Use one form of voice and tense for the whole process.
task
Tell all steps if you say there are nine steps, so it fits the task.
structure
Clear order of steps from start to end.
coherence
Uses linking words to show steps.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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