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Writing Samples
Band 3

The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Two top plans provide data about the Beechwood Farm site and its parts in 1950 and nowadays.
Overall
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, excellent minor changes and major transformations were established in the farm, increasing its functional area, and
also
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 developing it as a sustainable and nature-friendly complex. Turning to minor developments, some usages had been changed in
cental
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central
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 and western
areas
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. The track was converted to a
road
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. Fruit and vegetable
areas
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 remain unchanged, but a farm shop is added.
Farmhouse
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The farmhouse
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 and chicken section remain unchanged,
while
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 the barn was turned into a holiday cottage
and
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, and
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 a new barn building
is
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was
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 constructed at
southeast
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the southeast
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 point of the
road
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. Some advanced development had been shaped in the northern area. The sheep land is transformed into three useful
areas
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.
Firstly
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, a camping field with planted trees,
secondle
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secondly
, solar panels that provide the complex's power in a sustainable manner, and
also
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 two different parking
areas
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; one with accessibility to the main
road
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 and another one with access to the
complex'
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complex's
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road
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.

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Start with a short intro that says what you will talk about. Then list the main changes you see, and finish with a short wrap up.
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Use linking words to show order and help the flow (first, next, after that, but, however).
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Keep grammar clear and use the same tense. Check spellings (for example central, second, likely).
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Use simple words from the top 100 words and avoid long phrases.
strength
Strength: you give many exact changes by area, which helps the map task.
strength
Strength: you try to compare 1950 and today, which fits the task well.
detail
You give many details about changes in different parts of the farm.
comparison
You compare the old plan with the new plan.
general
There is a clear idea of what happened on the site.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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