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The best way to solve traffic and transportation problems is to encourage people to live in cities rather than suburbs or the countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Many people suggest that the best solution to
traffic
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 and
transportation
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 problems is to live in the
metropolitanareas
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metropolitan areas
, rather than the suburbs. Indeed , living in
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the
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center
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centre
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 near to
centre
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 of working places can reduce the high levels of
traffic
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. Staying in the cities near
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workplace
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the workplace
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 can reduce the level of
traffic
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 congestion,
such
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 as crowd can walk or using by cycle to their
workplace
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 rather than using a car.
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, gathering
crowd
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a crowd
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 to live in the capital can increase the use of public
transportation
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,
therefore
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 admission carbon dioxide and air pollution can be reduce, and
also
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 residing in an urban
centre
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 can cut your budget costs and travel time.
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 being near
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workplace
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the workplace
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 by walking can make you healthier.
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, staying in the countryside can cost you all
beyond
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than
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 of budget,
for example
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, gas and toll fees.
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 the long time travel to the home and the urban
centre
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.
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 living in the suburbs,
when is
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going
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 after office hours can lead to a high frequency of movement jams, as many
public
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people
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 want to go home by private vehicle and go to their places in
countryside
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the countryside
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.
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, staying in suburban areas can avoid the admission of carbon dioxide and air pollution, yet
this
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 is not the solution
,
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 many
public
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people
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 in society will buy personal vehicles because of the distance from home to
workplace
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.
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, the
lack
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a lack
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 of public
transportation
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 from the city
centre
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 to the suburban areas. The privately owned automobile can rise . In conclusion, the best way and solutions
in
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to
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traffic
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 jams and
transportation
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 are influencing
population
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the population
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 to stay in the capital , especially if their workplaces work place are in the metropolitan
.
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area.
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task response
Say your view clearly at the start of the essay and keep to it.
task response
Give 2-3 strong reasons with simple, true examples from life.
structure
Plan your writing: one part for answer, one for reasons, and a short wrap up.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words so the writing reads smoothly.
content
The essay stays on the topic and gives a view on city life to cut traffic.
coherence
There are some ideas about moving by walk or bike and using buses.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban sprawl
  • public transport infrastructure
  • commutes
  • residential density
  • ecological footprint
  • overcrowding
  • urban planning
  • car-sharing
  • traffic management
  • rural preservation
  • transportation policies
  • electric vehicles
  • sustainable living
  • incentivize
  • telecommuting
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