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The table shows the production of milk annually (in liters) in four countries in 1990,2000 and 2010

The table shows the production of milk annually (in liters) in four countries in 1990,2000 and 2010
The chart compares four countries in terms of how many litres of
milk
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produced every year in 1990 ,2000 and 2010
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, people produced significantly more in 2010, with in Tanzania ,Guatemala and especially in
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 the
production
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 of
milk
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 became more popular. The Netherlands ranked
first,
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producing
a
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apply
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11,262,000 litres of
milk
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,a figure that
then
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 fell to 11,155,000 in 2000,
then
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this
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 figure slightly increased to 11,466,000 in 2010.
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Guatemala experienced
rapid
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a rapid
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 rise in the
production
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 of
milk
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.It doubled its figures,from 26000 to 55000 in 2000 , and the number continued to grow until 84000 in 2010. Australia and Tanzania saw significant changes in their
production
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 of
milk
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.In Australia, the number decreased from 11,246000 to 11,105000 in 2000,
while
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 Tanzania experienced significant growth in their
production
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,from 87000 to 142000 and later rose to 155000,in 2000 and 2010, respectively

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • milk
  • country
  • year
  • liter(s)
  • liters
  • more
  • less
  • the most
  • the least
  • increase
  • rise
  • grow
  • go up
  • decrease
  • fall
  • drop
  • go down
  • stay the same
  • remain the same
  • change
  • pattern
  • trend
  • overall
  • highest
  • lowest
  • difference
  • compare
  • data
  • total
  • year by year
  • reach
  • peak
  • amount
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