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The chart below shows the resons why people travel to eork by bicyle or by car. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the resons why people travel to eork by bicyle or by car. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts
illustreat
Correct your spelling
illustrate
 the causes why
people
Use synonyms
 prefer to go to
work
Use synonyms
 by using cars or cycling.
Linking Words
overall
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Overall
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, the
prime
Correct word choice
primary
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 reason for
useing
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using
 cars is comfort for
people
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and
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, and
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the
Correct article usage
a
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less
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lesser
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 reason is safer than cycling
,
Punctuation problem
. On
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on the other
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hand
Punctuation problem
hand,
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people
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 prefer
to
Verb problem
apply
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cyclig
Correct your spelling
cycling
 because it is good for health and fitness, and
the
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a
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less
Correct word choice
lesser
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 reason
was
Wrong verb form
is
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 the speed.
People
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 who prefer to go to
work
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 by
useing
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using
 a car
they
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apply
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were 40
percent
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per cent
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,
when
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while
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the
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those
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other
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apply
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who
likes
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like
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 it because of the distance were 21
percent
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per cent
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.
Sfer
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Slightly more
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 than cycling 11% , need to carry things to
work
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 14% and faster than cycling 14% were the
less
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least
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percetages
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percentages
. The
most
Correct word choice
main
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 reasons for
people
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 who prefer cycling to go to
work
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 were health and fitness by 30
percent
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per cent
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, and less pollution as the same as health and fitness.
While
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 the other reasons were no costs by 13% and no parking problems by 15% and faster by 12%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Commute
  • Cyclists
  • Motorists
  • Sustainability
  • Eco-friendly
  • Caloric expenditure
  • Carbon footprint
  • Infrastructure
  • Accessibility
  • Traffic congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Punctuality
  • Fuel efficiency
  • Operational costs
  • Commuting trends
  • Safety gear
  • Public transport integration
  • Bike lanes
  • Peak hours
  • Weather patterns
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