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The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six month period in 2011

The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six month period in 2011
The graph illustrates the number of
inquiries
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 received by the Tourist Information Office in a city between
January
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 and
June
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 2011.
Overall
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, the number of in-person and telephone
inquiries
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 steadily increased,
while
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 letter/email
inquiries
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 experienced a slight decline over the six-month period.
According to
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 the graph, telephone
inquiries
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 started at approximately 900 in
January
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, dropped slightly to 800 in February, and
then
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 rose to around 1,000 between March and April. After that, they increased sharply to 1,400 in May and 1,600 in
June
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.
In contrast
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, in-person
inquiries
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 began at about 450 in
January
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 and showed a consistent upward trend, reaching around 1,300 in April, where they surpassed telephone
inquiries
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. The number continued to grow, reaching nearly 1,900 by
June
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.
On the other hand
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, letter/email
inquiries
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 started at approximately 790 in
January
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 and gradually declined to around 700 in March. The downward trend continued, falling below 600 in April and reaching roughly 400 by
June
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, becoming the lowest among the three channels.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words inquiries, january, june with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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