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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Some people think that companies and private individuals should bay to clean up the pollution that they produce, not the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many
people
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 believe that cleaning
pollution
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 waste is the sole responsibility of
public
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the public
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 and industries that
makes
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make
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 up for
this
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 .
This
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is disagree
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disagrees
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 with
this
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 statement because high taxes
goes
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go
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 to
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government
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the government
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 for social work and
violation
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violations
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 of rules. On the one hand ,
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Although
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although
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man made
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man-made
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 activities pollute the environment , it is notable that
people
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 are already paying for it in
form
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the form
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 of
tax
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taxes
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.
Massive
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A massive
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 amount of taxes
are
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is
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 imposed on all goods
which
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, which
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therefore
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 adds
into
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to
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nation 's
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the nation 's
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 revenue . A specific portion of money is deducted from every
pay check
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paycheck
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 biweekly
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whereas
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, whereas
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 companies are
also
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 paying a large percentage to
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government
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the government
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 .
For instance
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In
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in
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 India, Industries pay carbon tax to
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government
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the government
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due to
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 carbon emission
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thus
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, thus
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 paying for producing
pollution
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 .
However
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 ,
If
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if
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 society
will start
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starts
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 paying for
pollution
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 individually , they might disobey the rules .
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Government 's
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The government's
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 plan of controlling
pollution
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 is not feasible under these circumstances .
According to
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 today 's time period , Fines are applied
on
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to
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public
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the public
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 whenever someone violates
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government 's
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the government 's
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 restrictions. By taking
whole
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the whole
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 headache of
pollution
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 , Nobody will follow
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government 's
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the government 's
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followed
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apply
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policies . So , I
am
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do
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 not agree with the idea that all citizens should pay for creating
pollution
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 by themselves . In conclusion ,
Despite
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despite
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of
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apply
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seeking the need for
people
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 to pay for
pollution
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 ,
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government
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the government
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 should spend on its clean up . Taxes given to
nation
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the nation
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pays
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pay
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 off for it and make
people
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to
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apply
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follow
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government 's
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the government 's
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 rules.

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task
Your essay has a clear view, but you need a stronger set of ideas. Start with your view in one line, then give two clear reasons with simple, real examples. Make each paragraph keep one idea and show how it links to your view.
coherence
The text is easy to read in parts, but many mistakes slow the sense. Use short, plain sentences. Use easy linking words such as and, but, so, also. Put one idea in each paragraph and finish with a short ending.
task
Clear stance that you disagree with the idea.
coherence
Some examples about taxes and rules show the idea.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pollution
  • accountability
  • sustainable practices
  • industrial waste
  • emissions
  • financial responsibility
  • community initiatives
  • environmental protection
  • comprehensive approach
  • regulatory framework
  • cleaner technologies
  • waste management
  • economic incentives
  • natural resources
  • ecological balance
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