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Writing Samples
Band 4

It's been seen that reading for pleasure develops imaginations and better language skills than to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people believe that
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 of reading
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enhances
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 one 's language and power to imagine than that of watching television .
This
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 essay agrees with
this
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 statement because reading includes
visualizing
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visualising
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 the
scenerio
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scenario
 and boosting vocabulary . On the one hand , Books comprised of
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 of words or sentences which a writer
portraits
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 effortlessly
makes
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 it a gem . Imagination is the key which makes it viable for the reader to put
that
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 words into a picture .
Visualization
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 improves one 's ability
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imaginating
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imagine
 scenes .

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task
Have a clear intro with your view. State how much you agree.
task
Add more main ideas in the body and explain with the next sentence.
coherence
Use more link words to show how ideas are linked.
structure
Make three clear parts in the essay: intro, body, and end.
language
Check word form and spell simple words right.
content
The writer shows a clear view that reading helps more.
language
The idea of visualization is present.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • develops
  • imaginations
  • better language skills
  • watch
  • TV
  • agree
  • disagree
  • enhances
  • promotes
  • passive
  • engaging
  • stimulate
  • creativity
  • balanced
  • approach
  • beneficial
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