The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010
The given bar chart illustrates the amount of money which is spent on retail goods (computers, cars, books, perfume, and
cameras
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) in two countries,
France
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and Great Britain
in
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, in
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2010. The expenses are measured in pounds sterling.
Overall
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, the money spent more on cars by both countries
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while
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, while
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UK'sexpenditure
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expenditure
on perfume was deliberately less,
as well as
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the
spendings
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spending
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of
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on
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cameras
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in
France
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in the given period. The significant difference in categories was in
cameras
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among all. In terms of cars,
while
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British
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Britain
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spent
exact
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exactly
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450.000,
France
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's expense was 400.000.
Similarly
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, with
huge
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a huge
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gap between countries, the expenditure
of
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on
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books
together with
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cameras
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was nearly 400.000 and 350.000,
whereas
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100.000 and double that amount
is
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was
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spent
fewer
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apply
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by
France
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in 2010.
Nonetheless
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,
for
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apply
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perfumes
has
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have
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given a lot by
second
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the second
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country, 200.000 when
United
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the United
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Kingdom's costs were less than approximately 60.000, same as computers(350.000
on
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in
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UK
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the UK
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and around 400.000
by
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in
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France
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).

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words cameras, france with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • chart
  • countries
  • overall
  • compare
  • analyze
  • categories
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • proportions
  • statistics
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • notable
  • remarkable
  • substantial
  • considerable
  • determine
  • conclude
  • in conclusion
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