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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site
The provided map
display
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displays
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 the territory of Norbiton industrial
city
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 and
area's
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the area's
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 forthcoming prediction.
Overal
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Overall
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, the number of
building
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buildings
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 has increased gradually throughout the period.
Firstly
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, in the previous condition, there were only factories in the northeast of a
town
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,
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;
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however
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, now they have been replaced with
a
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apply
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housing. Later, the
city
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 centre has more access to various constructions
such
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 as
playground
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playgrounds
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,
school
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schools
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, medical
centre
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centres
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 and shops.
Moreover
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, farmlands
exchange
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are exchanged
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their
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for their
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 location to the east of a
town
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. A playground will be situated between two
housings
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housing
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next
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blocks next
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 to the
town
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. Moving on to the following information, the river has been divided into two sections with the formation of a housing in the northeast of a
town
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,
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. Furthermore
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furthermore
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, in the past, buildings were located mainly around
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city
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the city
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 centre,
whereas
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,
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apply
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 nowadays they are erected in diverse areas across the
town
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. To
summarize
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summarise
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, the new road will be constructed in the southeast of a
city
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in
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, in
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 addition to
preliminary
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a preliminary
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 one
making
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, making
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 the connection more convenient

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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