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Band 7.5

Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

Despite the fact that it has been pointed out by some that modern
communication
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 technology strengthens human connections, other
people
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 opine that modern social media has created more distance for individuals. Personally, I agree with the former idea as the digital
communication
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 tools offer a more convenient way to form and maintain friendships around the world. On the one hand, some individuals, including me, suggest that communicating via digital apps prompts a strong relationship for every single person. The reason is that when using social media or messaging apps,
people
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 can meet others with diverse cultural and financial backgrounds around the world, which provides them with chances to deepen their understanding of cultural diversity and enhance their sense of empathy,
thus
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 contributing to a greater sense of belonging and connection.
For instance
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, a vast majority of youngsters who are using Facebook say that they are able to stay in touch with European high school students virtually, which not only cultivates their understanding of the European studying environment but
also
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 helps them maintain long-distance friendships.
On the other hand
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, other
people
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 argue that modern technology has led to isolation.
This
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 is because when
people
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 are used to communicating with others by phone or computer, they may misunderstand others' meanings during face-to-face
communication
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, especially when explaining complex concepts, giving rise to conflicts, which harm
people
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's relationships. As an illustration, a huge number of office workers complain that since the pandemic started, they have been working from home, talking about issues in virtual meetings and having fewer opportunities to meet their colleagues in person. They find that the number of misunderstanding cases is growing, which results in weaker relationships with their co-workers. In conclusion,
people
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 may vary in their opinion about whether modern
communication
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 technology helps
people
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 get a closer relationship or not,
while
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 I am of the opinion that every single person is getting closer to each other, thanks to modern
communication
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 tools.

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grammar
Fix big and long sentences. Break them in smaller parts to be easy to read.
lexical resource
Use plain and common words. Keep the language simple and clear.
task response
Be clear on your main idea in the first paragraph and keep it in the end.
task response
Give more exact and strong examples that fit the point.
coherence
Use small connecting words to tie ideas between lines and sentences.
structure
The essay has a clear plan with intro, body and conclusion.
content
The writer shows both sides and gives an opinion.
content
There are some good examples to back up points.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • communicate
  • social media
  • virtual meetings
  • global community
  • isolation
  • distract
  • face-to-face interaction
  • personal connections
  • dependency
  • technology addiction
  • digital divide
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