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Band 4

In recent years, many countries have introduced laws to make public transport free of charge. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays,
according to
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 the laws that were introduced in many
countries
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, public
transport
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become
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has become
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 free of
charge
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. One main merit of
this
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 tendency is its convenience.
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, as everyone could use public
transport
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 for free, students who cannot afford the
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charge
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cost
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for
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of
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transportation
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,
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apply
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 may not have troubles
an longer
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anymore
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.
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, many students who live far away from
their either
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either their
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 university or school need to go there by
tansport
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transport
.
As a
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result
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result,
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 it will be more convenient for them to go by public
tansports
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transport
 without cost. If it were not for making it free, they could not afford
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to tranport
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tranport
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transport
 every day, so they would
pass
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miss
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 some lessons.
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, as students should not worry about
the
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apply
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transportation
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 any more, they can focus on their studies more carefully.
However
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, one main demerit of
this
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 is for
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the country
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country
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country's
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 finance.
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 to say, to make public
transport
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 free of
charge
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,
countries
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'
much
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apply
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money
shoul
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should
 be allocated to
transportation
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.
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, every vehicle
demand
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demands
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 fuel to move, especially the driver, or it might
be
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break
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 broken.
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, as officials in many
countries
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 put much money
to
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into
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transportation
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, other
importans
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important
factor
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factors
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 like medicine and education might become
undeveloped
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underdeveloped
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. If it were not for investing
for
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in
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transportaton
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transportation
, there would be more
improvents
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improvements
 in those important factors.
Therefore
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, as public
transport
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had
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has
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 become free of
charge
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 in many
countries
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, it leads to economic problems. In conclusion,
while
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 it will be
convenients
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convenient
 for people to use public
transport
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 for free,
besides
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 the economic
problems
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problems,
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 it will be pale in comparison.

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task response
Be clear on your view: say if advantages outweigh disadvantages and stick to it.
coherence
Add clear topic sentences and keep one idea per paragraph.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show flow between ideas, like first, next, but, also, therefore.
grammar
Fix grammar and spell key words so the text is easy to read.
examples
Give one or two stronger examples that fit the topic.
content
The topic is set and there is a view on both sides.
structure
There is attempt to show how free transport can help students.
potential
Some sentences show meaning even with errors.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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