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The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from during 1975 to 2005.

The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from during 1975 to 2005.
The
line
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 chart provides key information about the volume of annual visits to
Australia
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 by overseas residents. The table illustrates data on the country of origin
which
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 the
visitors
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 came in the years ranging from 1975 to 2005. The units are measured
number
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 of
visitors
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 (in millions).
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, it is clear from the
line
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 chart that there was a gradual increase between the years. In 1975, there were 10
million
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 foreign people who came to
Australia
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. After that , in 1985, the
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 went up to 15
million
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 . In 1995, it can be seen that there was a growth in the
number
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 of
visitors
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 arriving at 25
million
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. In 2005, the
line
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 reached a peak of 30
million
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.
According to
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 what is shown in the table, there was a sharp rise in the
number
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 of
visitors
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 in 2005 compared to 1975, from 8.8
million
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visitors
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 to 30.4
million
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. Japanese and South Korean individuals were the highest
number
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 of people visiting
Australia
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 in both years. It is noticeable that there was a sharp increase in travellers from Britain and Europe. China and the USA had the lowest travellers to
Australia
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 in 1975 and 2005.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, australia, visitors, number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual visits
  • overseas residents
  • country of origin
  • visitation trends
  • significant increase
  • fluctuations
  • global events
  • economic factors
  • travel restrictions
  • largest contributor
  • diverse countries
  • emerging markets
  • correlation
  • economic ties
  • cultural connections
  • growth in tourist numbers
  • factors contributing
  • data analysis
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