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🔶In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. 🔸What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

There is no denying the fact that
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the
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children
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 with their dreams
are
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is are
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 good thing for their health.
while
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other
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others
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 think the
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.
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this
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This
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 essay will discuss both points of view and share my opinion.
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 the one hand.
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 advantage of supporting
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 with
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 dreams or even simple things in life can help them grow with
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porsonality
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personality
, and they will not be afraid to ask for their wishes.
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,they
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also will
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will also
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 be closer
with
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to
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 their family.
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,if the kid goes to his family and
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 them for whatever he wants and they
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disapprove of
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 him,he will grow
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a weak
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 personality
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, which
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 can lead him to
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a negative
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 future.
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.The disadvantage of not supporting the
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 is
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that the
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 future
ganeration
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generation
 will be disappointed if they
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 with individuals
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who
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does
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 not get much attention and support when they
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 young,
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 leads to less care from their parents and
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 the
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a ganration
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ganration
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generation
 like them,and
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 going
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rounds
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.
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 point to consider
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,if the
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doesn't
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don't
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 get the motivation they want
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 their parents,they will be searching for it in other individuals.
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for
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 example,the girls
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who
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 try to get attention
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 boys in school or any place they probably
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don't
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got
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 it
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 home. In conclusion,there is no easy answer to
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however
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,
i
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I
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 tend to believe that support should always come from
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parents,
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 to not
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have
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children
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 search for it in others.

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structure
Paragraphs are not clear. Start with a plan. Use one idea per paragraph with a clear topic sentence.
planning
Intro should paraphrase the prompt and state your view. Put your opinion in the last sentence of the intro.
content
Each paragraph should have a topic sentence and then facts or examples.
language
Check grammar and spelling. Use simple verbs and fix common errors.
cohesion
Use linking words to show clear contrast and order.
content
The essay shows an attempt to discuss both sides.
style
There is a clear final opinion.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • perseverance
  • self-esteem
  • confidence
  • obstacles
  • ambitious goals
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • stress
  • burnout
  • external factors
  • socio-economic status
  • resources
  • opportunities
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