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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
The given line graph illustrates the number of
sightseer
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sightseers
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 visiting a specific Caribbean island between the years 2010 and 2017.
Visitors
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 were demonstrated in 3 different categories.
Linking Words
overall
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, all of the lines were higher than their start points.
Category
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The category
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 of the total showed
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a dramatical
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dramatical
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 climb. The number of
visitors
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 who
staying
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stay
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 on cruise ships
passed
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exceeded
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 the
category
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number
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 of
cisitors
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visitors
 staying on the
islan
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island
, yet it had started below the
people
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 who prefer
stay
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to stay
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 on the island. In 2010, total
visitors
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 were 1 million, but
it
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they
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 jumped to just above 3.5 million
people
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 in 2017.
Moreover
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, it remained
unchange
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unchanged
in
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apply
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between 2015 and 2016. The other 2 categories illustrated opposite trends between 2010 and 2012. Cruise
ships
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ship
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 stayers steadily increased to 2
millon
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million
people
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 from just below 0.5
millon
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million
visitors
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 between the given years.
Nevertheless
Linking Words
,
people
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 who
preffered
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preferred
stay
Verb problem
to stay
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 on the island
standed
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stood
 at 1.5 million
people
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 between 2013 and 2017.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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