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The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from during 1975 to 2005.

The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from during 1975 to 2005.
The line graph provides information about the number of annual visits to Australia
by
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from
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the
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apply
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foreign countries. The table shows information on the country or origin
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from where
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where
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which
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 the visitors came from
to
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from
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 1975 to 2005
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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chart
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the chart
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 shows that the number of visitors increased gradually from 1975 to 2005. The highest point of the graph is 2005
and
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, and
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 the lowest is 1975. It
show
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shows
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 that between
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this
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these
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 years there is
difference
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a difference
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about
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of about
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 20 million
According to
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 the table of the
guest
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guest,
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its
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it
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gives
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shows
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 that there is
big
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a big
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 difference between 1975 to 2005. Japan and South Korea
the
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had the
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 highest number in the table that visited Australia in 2005 , It is around 30.000.000 visitors. It is noticeable there is
sharp
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a sharp
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 increase in
travelers
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travellers
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 from Britain and Europe. China and
USA
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the USA
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 had the lowest
travelers
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travellers
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 to
the
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apply
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Australia during 1975-2005. The
touristic
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tourist
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 numbers
has
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have
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 increased a lot
than
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since
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 1975
due to
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 Japan and South Korea

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual visits
  • overseas residents
  • country of origin
  • visitation trends
  • significant increase
  • fluctuations
  • global events
  • economic factors
  • travel restrictions
  • largest contributor
  • diverse countries
  • emerging markets
  • correlation
  • economic ties
  • cultural connections
  • growth in tourist numbers
  • factors contributing
  • data analysis
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