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The pictures show the changes of a park from 1980 to the present day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The image illustrates the difference in a park in 1980 and
at
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in
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 the current days.
Overall
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, there were many developments made during the years, the park that
once was
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was once
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 fenced by walls and had only one entrance by a gate, today is
tottaly
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totally
 open with four different ways to get
in
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into
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 the centre. In 1980,
existed
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there existed
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 only two green areas
and
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, and
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 they were
separed
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separated
 by the
path way
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pathway
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 in the middle
, there
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. There
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 were
a
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apply
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four banks
circulating
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surrounding
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 a lake,
tree
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apply
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big green
threes
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trees
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 and some flowers.
Comparing
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Compared
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with
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to
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 nowadays, the only unchanging thing is the lake, as it
remain
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remains
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 in the same place, yet with only tree banks left. Other developments occur during the years, in one of the four green zones, there
is
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are
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 two tables around green and pink
threes
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trees
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, where people are able to
seat
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sit
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 and enjoy a
pic-nic
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picnic
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. The
last
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 two areas
is
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are
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tottaly
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totally
 free, where one of them is dedicated
for
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to
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 kids to play sports

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structure
Group ideas in a clear way. Use a short intro, then two body parts, and a simple end.
content
Make sure you answer all parts. Say what changed, how it is now, and compare.
grammar
Use simple grammar. Keep verb forms and sentence sizes easy.
cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like and, but, also and then to join ideas.
accuracy
Check small spelling mistakes like tot tally and picnic.
task response
You tell what changed from old to new.
coherence
You note the lake stays in the same place.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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