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Some people think that it’s a good idea for parents to help their children with their homework. Others believe that children should do their homework on their own. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some individuals hold the opinion that a good idea is helping their
childer
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 with their homework,
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 the other group think
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. In
this
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 essay, I will provide opinions on both views, including my own. On the one hand, assisting pupils to do their assignments is beneficial for creating mutual trust between parents and child, on
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top of
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that,
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 it
also
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 makes them closer to each other.
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, some individuals who do not have enough time to spend with their little ones
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 can just sit
together with
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 them and complete school
lessens
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 by explaining them if they
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are struggling
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 to understand
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 subject.
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, there are a lot of people who try to raise their infants more
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 so that they tend
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not
take
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a
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part in their
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children's
 school life.
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,
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 parents
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 have kind of stoic views and raise their little ones
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 as well.
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, even though they see that toddlers are in need of a
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little
 bit
assistance
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of assistance
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, they keep being loyal to their views and just showing a lack of support.
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,
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 my
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opinion,
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 there are both sides
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 supporting children with their homework, and both have consequences. Assisting means being close and being tied to the children,
while
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 letting the little ones
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do homework themselves makes them stronger, independent and just increases reliance on themselves.

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planning
Plan an outline before you write to keep ideas in order.
coherence
Use clear topic sentences in each paragraph and link words.
grammar
Use easy grammar and fix spelling mistakes.
content
Give clear examples that relate to the point you write about.
structure
End with your view in a simple, clear sentence.
structure
The essay shows both views and has a clear end.
structure
There is an intro and a conclusion.
coherence
There are linking words like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand'.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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