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Band 3.5

Many people try to achieve success through their career or education. What can success mean to different people? What is your view of success? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

We live in a modern era, where everything is happening at a fast pace. Everyone is trying to
achive
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achieve
 success
over
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in
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 a night.
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,
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Sucess
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 has a deeper meaning and longer journey than what most individuals think. When we view
celebrties
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celebrities
,
scientiest
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scientists
, and
bussiness
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business
 owners, we tend to
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believe
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 that they were born talented. When in fact, there
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 to be a lot of struggles and failures in their early careers. These challenges that no one talks about are
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. The key is consistency and
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discipline
. People differ in defining success.
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, mothers find
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sucess
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success
 in
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 their
childern
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children
 and watching them grow into leaders.
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, fathers consider owning a
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comfortable
 house and providing a good quality of life to their families
is
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 their biggest
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achievement
.
Interesntingly
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Interestingly
,
career wise
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career-wise
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, the meaning of
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sucess
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success
 varies greatly among different professions. Health
professions
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professionals
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such
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 as doctors, nurses, and surgeons find satisfaction in healing and curing diseases.
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,
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scientists
 find
thier
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their
 pleasure in new discoveries that can change someone's life
to
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 the better.
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 but not least, teachers aim to build a new generation that
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helps
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 serve the
countrey
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country
 and define their
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sucess
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success
 by
thier
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their
students
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achivements
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achievements
. In summary, success has
different
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a different
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 meaning depending
of
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on
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 the goal that someone is trying to
achive
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achieve
 on either the personal or the professional
leve
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level
. No matter what target we have in mind, with
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continuous
 hard work and
persistant
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persistent
 focus, any goal can be
achived
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achieved
.

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planning
Plan your essay. Start with a short view of your main idea. Then give 2 or 3 strong points with a small example for each. Finish with a short line that repeats your view.
structure
Make each paragraph have one main idea. Begin with a clear topic sentence. Use linking words to join ideas and to show how they fit.
accuracy
Check spelling and grammar. Fix common mistakes and make sure word forms are right (for example 'success', 'achieve', 'their').
strength
The writer shows many ideas of how success can be seen by different people.
conclusion
The essay ends with a hopeful message that work can help reach goals.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fulfillment
  • personal goals
  • happiness
  • career milestones
  • professional development
  • financial independence
  • security
  • philanthropy
  • contribution
  • personal development
  • recognition
  • work-life balance
  • self-improvement
  • well-being
  • subjective
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