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The pie charts give information about visitors to the US from different countries from1988 and 1992.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts give information about visitors to the US from different countries from1988 and 1992.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts show the percentage of
visitors
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 to the United States from different countries, over a 4-year period between 1988 and 1992.
Overall
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, what stands out from the chart is that the number of Canadians and other
visitors
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 who visited the US decreased slightly,
while
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 the proportion of Mexicans and Chinese increased gradually. Looking at the details,
initially
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, the percentage of Canadian
visitors
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 was more than half (53%) in 1988. After that, the figure experienced a steady drop to 40% in 1992. As for the number of other
visitors
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 dropped significantly from 12% to 4% between 1988 and 1992.
By contrast
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, the proportion of Mexicans who visited the US was a quarter in 1988, after which the figure fell to 20% in 1990.
However
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, it showed a gradual increase to 26% by the end of the year. Turning to the percentage of Chinese was one in ten in 1988, which was followed by a sharp growth to 30% in 1992.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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