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Band 2

“Average Carbon Dioxide Emissions per Person in Four European Countries (1967–2007)”

The line graph illustrates the mean release of
carbon
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dioxide
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 per individual in four countries from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
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emission
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the emission
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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 in
the
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Italy and Portugal experienced an upward trend,
while
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release
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the release
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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 in the UK and Sweden showed a downward trend over the period. Despite it, the UK is a country with
most
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the highest
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emission
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emissions
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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.
To begin
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 with, in
1967
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1967,
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 the
emission
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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 in the UK was approximately 10 metric
tonnes
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. It remained constant until 1997
but
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, but
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 in 2007, the release of gas
drop
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dropped
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 to 8 metric
tonnes
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.
Furthermore
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, the
emission
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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 in
the
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Sweden decreased from 8 metric
tonnes
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 to 6 metric
tonnes
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 over the period.
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, the gas evolved in
the
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apply
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Italy
,
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apply
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 in 1967.
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It was
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 nearly 2 metric
tonnes
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. It
raised
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rose
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 dramatically to almost 6 metric
tonnes
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 in 2007.
Moreover
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, in
the
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Portugal, the
emission
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 of gas rose to
from
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4 metric
tonnes
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.

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task
The writer should give a clear start line and a short end line. Use one line for the idea at the top and a final line that ends the idea.
task
Make the plan for the graph: first, say the trend for all four countries, then pick one or two facts from the graph. Use the same numbers as shown on the graph. Check that each fact is true.
coherence
Use clear link words. Use simple ties like 'and', 'but', 'also', 'then', 'after', 'but' to show order and show the rise or fall of the data.
general
The essay tries to give an overall view with 'Overall' and a start with 'To begin with'.
general
There are some clear data points in the text.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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