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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates data
of
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on
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 the use of fish and different kinds of meat in
european
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European
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 states, per
each pupil
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capita
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.
Overall
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, except for
chickens
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, all meats reduced in 2004.
Chickens
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,Beef
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and beef
 witnessed the largest
flauctuations
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fluctuations
,
while
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fishes
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fish
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 remained stable up to
over
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apply
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1994
,
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.
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Chickens
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 saw the most dramatic increase from the lowest in 1979
,
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apply
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 to the highest in 2004.
beef
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Beef
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 had the highest
grams
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 per person each week with just over 200
grams
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,
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;
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however
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,
this
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steadliy
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steadily
 decreased to
be
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apply
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below 150
grams
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 in 2004.
Chickens
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 started
around
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at around
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 150
grams
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, which dramatically increased
just
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to just
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 over 250
grams
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,
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. Chickens
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chickens
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 saw the highest use from the lowest in 1979 to the highest in 2004. Lamb started in his highest to 150grams, and remained falling down until around 1984,
quite
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then
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jump
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jumped
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 to
apprroximately
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approximately
 145
grams
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, before falling again in 1989.
fishes
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Fish
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 started
over
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at over
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 50
grams
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stable
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, stable
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 up to over
1999
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1999,
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as
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and
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then
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 slightly
rised
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rose
 after the
reduce
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reduction
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, fish
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. Fish
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 are the lowest
use
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used
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for
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by
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people of any meat in the line graph

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chickens, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption trends
  • steady increase
  • most consumed meat
  • relatively stable
  • general decline
  • pronounced decline
  • over the years
  • throughout the period
  • depicts
  • span
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