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Globalisation has both advantages and disadvantages. Discuss both and give your opinion.

Over the past decades, borders have outweighed their importance, and humanity acts like a one nation, so we call it globalisation. It is a common fact
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 we are facing it more and more over time. Being like a single community has its own unique specifications. In my view, it has its own merits. In
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, especially over the
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 30 years, dominant nations have
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profound
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 on underdeveloped countries. Their effects are not just on traditional aspects but
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 on a variety of bases.
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, fast food was originally found in and widely spread in the USA.
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, TV, radio and cinema have a great
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 on their broadcasting and flourishing in other nations.
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 , younger generations are more familiar with
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 of globalisation.
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, acting like one big global village
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 brings its own advantages
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 a clear example is that written and spoken English is the main language for scientific research.
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, 67% of scientific papers have been written in English since 1950.
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, it has a profound
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 on making science
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common language, sharing the same tongue, making thoughts easy.
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, it contributed to making research.
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, globalisation has positive and negative impacts on every nation. On one hand, it could be harmful
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 eroding some nations' kitchen traditions
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, for scientific reasons, it has a profound
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. What the result is when time
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, it will spread on the globe and change many different things in many different ways
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. It is inevitable. It's a matter of time only.

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structure
Plan your writing. Make a simple plan before you begin. Each part should have one big idea that fits the question.
structure
Make a clear first sentence for each paragraph. Start with a line that says what you will talk about.
ideas
Explain each point more. Say why it is true and add a small example.
grammar
Use short and clear sentences. Check for small spelling mistakes like 'quizine' should be 'cuisine'.
coherence
Use small joins to link ideas. Words like 'and', 'but', 'also', 'so' help the flow.
content
You show your view and you give both sides.
content
You add real examples, like science in English.
coherence
You add some link words to help flow.
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