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The line graph gives data about people who asks to gain information at the tourist offices from January to June in UK.

The line graph gives data about people who asks to gain information at the tourist offices from January to June in UK.
he line graph illustrates data about individuals who needs information at the Tourist offices with three different methods, between
January
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 and
June
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 in Uk.
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, except for gaining information by a telephone, all methods increased in
June
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. in
person
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enquiries
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 witnessed the most dramatic increase over the period,
while
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 those use by letter or email declined steadliy. Telepone
enquiries
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also
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 rose but a slower and more fluctuated rate stable with in
person
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 between Apr to Jun in
January
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 offices received about 400 in
person
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enquiries
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, compared to around 800 by telephone and 750 by letter. from febuary onwards, in
person
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 method grew sharply, overtaking the two other methods in march and reaching nearly 1900 in
june
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. Telephone
enquiries
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 increased moderately from 800 in
January
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 to 1600 in
june
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.
enquiries
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 by letter and emails showed a countinuoes drop throughout the period, reducing from about 750 in
january
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 to just under 400 in
june
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words january, june, person, enquiries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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