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The chart below shows waste collection by a recycling center from 2011 to 2015.

The chart below shows waste collection by a recycling center from 2011 to 2015.
The bar chart depicts the amount of
waste
Use synonyms
 which collected in the years between 2011 and 2015. The data is given in
tons
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Overall
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,
paper
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 was the dominant material in all years except 2013,
while
Linking Words
 garden
waste
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 showed the lowest
rate
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 in 2012. The
paper
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 indicated the highest
rate
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 in 2015, 70
tons
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.
While
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 the
rate
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 was almost the same in both 2012 and 2013, at 50 and 51, respectively. Whilst in 2011,
paper
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 was 57. By 2013, the amount of
paper
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waste
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 dropped significantly to 40. Glass,
on the other hand
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, illustrated almost the same proportion in
years
Correct article usage
the years
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 2011, 2013, and 2014, 48
tons
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 with 2
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tons
Correct your spelling
2-ton
 difference in 2014. In 2012, glass represented 41
tons
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and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 by 2015, it unexpectedly increased to 52. In 2011, the proportion of tins was 35
tons
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.
Then
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 it declined to 27 in 2012. Surprisingly, the
rate
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 increased to 34 in 2013.
Then
Linking Words
 it made up a marginal decline to 33 in 2014. By 2015, it represented 39
tons
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. Garden
waste
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 was 32
tons
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 at the beginning,
then
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 it plummeted
,
Punctuation problem
apply
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representing 15
tons
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. By 2015, it boosted as twice
as
Change preposition
to
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 it was, 31
tons
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. In 2014, the quantity of
waste
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 amounted to 27
tons
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, after
Punctuation problem
. After
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 a year, it experienced
growth
Correct article usage
a growth
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 to 35
tons
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, tons, paper, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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