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The diagram below illustrates how a simple water filter is constructed and how it functions to produce clean drinking water. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below illustrates how a simple water filter is constructed and how it functions to produce clean drinking water. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram below provides information
how
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on how
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 a simple
water
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 filter is constructed and how it system
to
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works to
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 produce clean drinking
water
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Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the process
consist
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consists
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 of several stages, beginning with pouring unfiltered
water
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 into the container, ending with filtered
water
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pass
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passing
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 through
which
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apply
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a tap.
Firstly
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, the cover is opened, and
water
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 is poured into the container.
Following
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this
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 stage,
water
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 remained in a bottle for a few movements,
then
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 dropped into three different types of layers
;
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apply
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 which is sand, charcoal, and gravel
,
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.
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it
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Its
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fucntion
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function
 can
filtered
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filter
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 the impurities. For the purpose of filtering clean
water
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,
water
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 is filtered
the
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of the
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 dirty material in the gravel layer. To complete the production,
water
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 is delivered to the storage tank via a
centain
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certain
 pipe.
Next,
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keep
in
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apply
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the drinking
water
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 container.
In addition
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,
this
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 pure
water
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 bottle has three layers, and the tap is at the lowest layer. At the final stage, the pure
water
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 comes from a particular tap.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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