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The diagram below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

The diagram below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.
The maps provide key information about the plan for
changes
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 in
school
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the school
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site
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 in 2004 and 2024.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graphs that
changes
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 not only touched the
site
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, students
numbers
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apply
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were
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was
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 increasing by 400 applicants. In terms of
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site
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the site
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 in 2004, there were three buildings in the North region, two school buildings between the Path, and
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a sport
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sport
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sports
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 field next to them.
In addition
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, the vast majority of
area
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the area
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 was a garden, which started from the North to the South. In 2004, there were a
little
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few
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changes
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happened
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that happened
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in
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on
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 the
site
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, like
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the constructed
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constructed
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construction
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 of a new road between the
buildings
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building
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 region and
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the trees
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trees
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tree
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 area, which connected the old car park to the new car park.
Moreover
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, the
sport
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sports
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 field
replaced
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was replaced
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 with
school
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a school
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 building.
While
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 the main entrance, the Eastern road, car
park1
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park 1
 and the South garden
were stayed
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remained
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 the same throughout the years.
Finally
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, the
changes
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 only touched a few facilities
,
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;
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however
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, the substantial
different
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difference
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 was in the construction of
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the sport
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sport
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sports
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 field just under a new road.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words changes, site with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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