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Band 4.5

The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

These plans illustrate how the Beechwood
Farm
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 has changed since 1950.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
this
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 form has changed a lot after reconstruction, and several facilities were added to it. Some recreational areas have been added to that
farm
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.
For example
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, there was a barn on the east side of the
farm
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 in 1950, which was removed, and three holiday cottages were built
instead
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. Two new parking spaces were constructed near the roads in the east and northwest of the complex.
Moreover
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, four solar panels were placed in the northeast of the
farm
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.
Similarly
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, a new camping field was made in the sheep
area
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.
Therefore
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, the
Farm
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 sheep was relocated and became smaller.
Then
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, it was placed in the fruit trees
area
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 near the road.
In addition
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, all four tracks were changed to roads, and a new barn was built at the bottom of a triangular road.
Apart from
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this
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, some districts remained unchanged, like the chicken compartment, the vegetable
farm
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, the soft fruit
area
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, and the fruit trees
area
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. All in all,
it is clear that
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 the Beechwood
Farm
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 became more modernised, and it was altered to provide leisure activities for visitors.

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task response
Your answer has many facts. Try to say the big changes first in a short list, then add detail only where needed.
lexical resource
Be clear with word choice. Use 'farm' not 'form' and 'sheep area' not 'Farm sheep'.
grammatical accuracy
Keep one past tense form for most sentences. Common verbs are 'was', 'were', 'became', 'placed', 'built'.
word count
Only add length if you have more real points. Do not add words just to grow the page.
coherence and cohesion
Use good link words to help flow: firstly, next, then, finally. This helps the reader follow your idea.
overview
A clear overview at the start.
detail
Many details about what changed.
cohesion
Some linking words help the flow.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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