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What qualities do you think are most important for achieving success in life? Provide at least three reasons to support your view

Success is what keeps us going and gives us
courage
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 to continue.
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 not everybody can reach success. Why is that? How can somebody become successful
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? What
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 qualities do they need to achieve their goal? First and foremost, the most important quality to have is determination. Determination is the ability to focus on one aim. You need to be ready to face up to all sorts
challenges
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, overcome your fears and not be afraid to make mistakes. You
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 have to have self-assurance and self-control in difficult situations and make sure
to not
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not to
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 give in to your emotions.
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, a
person
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 who is not dedicated to their goal is more prone to emotional outbursts
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 there is a likely chance that their self-esteem is low.
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, a
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 filled with courage and single-mindedness is braver and is ready to overcome any obstacles that come their way.
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 why it is vital to have determination and self-assurance in order to become successful.
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, the most common characteristic of a successful
person
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 is their ability to stay motivated. Without
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motivation
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motivation,
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 you would not have a real reason or motive to try and strengthen your worst personality traits. An individual can only progress in life if they learn from their mistakes and try
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do
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make
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 them ever again.
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, if you are not motivated, you are most likely to give up very easily and put yourself down constantly. A
person
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 who has
motivation
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 reaches their goals faster.
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, the key to becoming successful is to stay motivated.
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 to all the points I have covered, being optimistic can
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 help you reach your goals faster and boost your
motivation
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 . To illustrate, an individual who is pessimistic probably thinks lowly of themselves,
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 why they believe that they cannot commit to anything. An optimist
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, will have enough
motivation
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 and self-assurance to pursue the things they want in life.
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why
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apply
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, it is important
do
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 see the good in everything and stay positive. In conclusion, the qualities that you need to have in order to become successful are dedication,
motivation
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 and optimism. We all need to learn a thing or two from our
role-models
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, so we can
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 make a change in the world. Let us all strive to be positive and do the very best we can!

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development
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structure
Make links between ideas clearer and use shorter sentences.
examples
Use more precise examples from life or study to back your points.
structure
A clear plan with three main points.
coherence
Good use of sign words like First and foremost and Secondly.
task response
A closing line that restates the main idea.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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