It is a common aspiration among young people to run their own business rather than work for an employee. Do you think the advantages of working for yourself outweigh the drawbacks?
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known among young people to think of
their own business
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is it fun to work for someone who tells you what to do 24/7
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Plan your essay with a clear view at the start and finish the idea simply.
Use short, plain sentences to show your view.
Link ideas with 'and', 'but', 'so', and 'also' to show how ideas go together.
Check spelling and use correct word forms like building and ages.
Your wish to start from the start is clear.
You speak with your own view.
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
- Summary
- Restatement of thesis
- Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
- In conclusion
- To conclude
- To summarize
- Finally
- In a nutshell
- In general