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You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter - describe what you enjoyed about the course -say how much cooking you've done since the course - suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in order to give feedback on the cookery
course
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 that I passed a few months ago at your school.
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 with, I truly appreciate the structured and organised method of teaching, whether it was academic knowledge or hands-on experience. The curriculum
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course
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, was taught in an effective way, so that students can learn efficiently. I have cooked several times right after I finished my cookery
course
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. Since I work as a chef in a large food chain restaurant, I prepare food for more than 100 people every day.
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, often I prepared many cuisins for guests at my home, they really enjoyed my finger-licking dishes. I would like to suggest
you
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about
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a cookery
course
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 if you would like to offer
in
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it in
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 the future, which is Chinese food. Nowadays , many people tend to eat Chinese cuisine,
such
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 as noodles and dumplings. I am eager to join in the future if you could introduce
this
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course
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. I look forward to joining you once again in the new
course
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. Yours sincerely, Dev

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structure
Keep one idea in each paragraph and make a short note about it before moving to the next idea.
grammar
Fix small errors in spelling and use. For example, 'cuisins' should be 'cuisines', and 'finger-licking' is not needed in a formal letter.
tone
Use a more formal tone. Try to avoid casual words and singing phrases.
content
Give a clear example of what you liked in the course and why it helped you.
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Be precise about what you did after the course, with a clear time frame or numbers if you can.
greeting
You are polite with a good closing and greeting.
content
You show you use the course in your job by naming your work and the number of people you cook for.
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You ask for a new course, which shows you want to learn more.
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