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The working week shou/d be shorter and workers shou/d have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

Many people think there should be fewer weekdays and more weekends. Personally, I could not agree more with
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 idea. I strongly think that in
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 way you can have more energy to do other things and much more time to spend with your family or friends. Currently, weeks have five
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days
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 and two weekend
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. If
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was
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 not the case and there was an extra day off, workers would have much more energy and perform better on their
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days
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 since they would have been able to recover their strength during
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 period and
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 way be more focused on their tasks.
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, I once skipped
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 on a Friday because it was a holiday, and the following week I felt much more energetic, which was reflected in the improvement in the quality of my performance. A longer weekly break
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 has a clear impact on your time and makes you more relaxed and happy when you return to
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. Even if you don't have anything to do on your
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 off,
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 extra day gives you the opportunity to spend more time with loved ones or to invest in yourself by pursuing your
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 hobby or simply relaxing.
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, a study by the French psychologist Bertrand Pariset states that after more rest during the week, returning to
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 becomes more enjoyable
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 an increase in happiness and calm. In conclusion, I firmly believe that more rest is necessary as it helps you feel more energetic and much more relaxed
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 your return to your job.

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task
Make the opening clear by stating your view in one line and keep it steady.
task
Give more clear reasons and add one or two more examples to show your claim well.
language
Use short, simple sentences to keep a clean style and easy flow.
content
The essay shows a clear view and a steady line of thought.
structure
There is a good flow of ideas from one part to the next.
coherence
Paragrahs help the reader follow the idea.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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