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The plans show information about the first floor of a library in 1998 and the same area now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two plans show changes to the first floor of a library in 1998 and the present.
Overall
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it is clear that
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 the area has been significantly
modernized
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 and
reorganized
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 to provide more comfortable and self-service zones for visitors. Several old facilities were removed or replaced with new ones. In 1998, the librarian’s desk was located in the
center
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 of the library, with study tables and chairs nearby. The computers were situated in the northwest part, and reference
books
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 and maps were placed along the northern side. The southern part included local reference
books
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, a book display near the entrance, and photocopiers beside it. Currently, the layout has been simplified and opened up. The librarian’s desk and study tables have been removed to make space for a large book display in the
center
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. The northern part has been redesigned to include a coffee table, and a self-service desk has been added to the area on the right. The southeast corner has become a study room, providing visitors with a place for studying. Meanwhile, the space for local reference
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 now contains some new
books
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, with a few chairs remaining on the left-hand side.

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task response
Make two clear paragraphs: one for 1998 and one for now. Start with a short overview.
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List main points for each time and add a small compare on each point (before and now).
coherence
Use word so you can link ideas. Use words like 'and', 'but', 'while', 'then', 'now' to show contrast.
coherence
Keep the order same when you talk about the two plans so the essay reads in a smooth way.
lexical
Use simple words only. Avoid hard words and long form spellings.
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Clear overall idea about changes.
coherence
Good time reference (1998 vs now) used to compare.
coherence
Features are described in a logical flow.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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