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The graph below shows the consumption of three spreads from 1981 to 2007.

The graph below shows the consumption of three spreads from 1981 to 2007.
The line graph presents the amount of three kinds of spreads which were consumed from 1981 to 2007.
Overall
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, butter and margarine declined over the period given,
whereas
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 low-fat and reduced spreads experienced growth. Looking in more detail, butter increased marginally by about 20
grams
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 over five years, peaking at nearly 160
grams
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 in 1986, making it the highest of the three spreads.
However
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, it dropped significantly to 100 in 1991 and fell
further
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 to approximately 50 in 2007.
On the other hand
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, margarine use was relatively stable between 1981 and 1996 at around 80-100
grams
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, before gradually decreasing to just 40
grams
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 by the end of the period.
In contrast
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, low-fat and reduced spreads began to be consumed in 1996 at roughly 10,
then
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 surged to just over 80 in 2001, surpassing both other spreads.
Although
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this
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 figure slipped slightly to 70 in 2007, it remained the most consumed type that year.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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