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The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps
compares
Correct subject-verb agreement
compare
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 the current and in 2006 layouts of Lynwich
College
Use synonyms
.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that new infrastructures and recreational areas have
introduced
Verb problem
been introduced
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 over the years. The most
noticable
Correct your spelling
noticeable
futures
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features
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 seem like
big a
Correct word order
a big
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 cafeteria was located at the
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center
Change the spelling
centre
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 of
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college
Correct article usage
the college
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map
Use synonyms
.
Firstly
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, in
2006
Correct article usage
the 2006
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map
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, there was a
sports
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 field at the
south east
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southeast
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 corner of
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map
Correct article usage
the map
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which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 was
nearby
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near
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 a
library
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 just north of it.
Linking Words
on
Fix capitalization
On
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 the other hand,
northeast
Correct article usage
the northeast
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 side was allocated for
car
Correct article usage
a car
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 park
also
Linking Words
.
In addition
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 to that, a
Use synonyms
center
Change the spelling
centre
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path way
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pathway
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 was
connetting
Correct your spelling
connecting
 the main buildings
like
Punctuation problem
, like
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Use synonyms
library
Correct article usage
the library
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to
Punctuation problem
, to
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Use synonyms
college
Correct article usage
the college
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building
Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
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 1 and 2.
Secondly
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, in the present plan,
Use synonyms
sports
Correct article usage
the sports
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 field area
reduced
Verb problem
is reduced
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ins
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in
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 size and
new
Correct article usage
a new
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sports
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 centre
rebuılt
Verb problem
is rebuılt
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 near
to
Change preposition
apply
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it.
Hence
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,
car
Correct article usage
the car
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 park
also
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diminis
Correct your spelling
diminishes
 in dimensions for bike
strorage
Correct your spelling
storage
, another
Punctuation problem
. Another
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 feature is
new
Correct article usage
the new
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library
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 building relocated between the
colloge
Correct your spelling
college
 building 1 and
college
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 building 2 and
conneted
Correct your spelling
connected
 via new roads with each other. New public transport facilities
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also
Verb problem
have also
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established
Verb problem
been established
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in
Change preposition
on
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Correct article usage
the northen
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northen
Correct your spelling
northern
 side
too
Rephrase
apply
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.
Furthermore
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, the most
noticable
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noticeable
 change
of
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in
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current
Correct article usage
the current
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depict
Replace the word
depiction
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 looks like the cafeteria
bulding
Correct your spelling
building
 in the
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center
Change the spelling
centre
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 of the
map
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which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 serves as a lunch hub
of
Change preposition
for
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 students.
To sum up
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, the two maps
shows
Correct subject-verb agreement
show
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 the Lynwich
College
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insfrastructures
Correct your spelling
infrastructures
but
Punctuation problem
, but
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 over the
years
Punctuation problem
years,
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 many buildings like
cafeteria
Correct article usage
the cafeteria
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,
sports
Use synonyms
Use synonyms
center
Change the spelling
centre
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, new
library
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 building and bus stop were installed in the area.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words college, center, map, sports, library with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underwent significant changes
  • consisted of
  • large open space
  • utilized
  • relocated
  • limited facilities and amenities
  • wider range of facilities and amenities
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