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The table below gives information about consumer spending ondifferent items in five different countries in 2002.

The table below gives information about consumer spending ondifferent items in five different countries in 2002.
The table outlines the
percentage
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 of different items which consumer spends on in five different countries in
the
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2002. The largest
percentage
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 of items is
diet
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about
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to
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 Food/Drinks/Tobacco in five countries.
By
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In
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the
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apply
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contrast, all
the
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apply
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consumer spends
least
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the least
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 on
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study
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studies
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 about Leisure/Education.
Besides
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, the cost for dress about Clothing/Footwear is between
diet
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 and
study
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.
The both
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Both
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 percentages of
diet
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 in Ireland and Turkey are approximately 30%, which is about twice as much as the
percentage
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 in other countries. Normally, the
percentage
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 of dress is about 6%, except which is 9% in Italy. The largest
percentage
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 of
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study
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the study
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 is 4.35% in Turkey, 1 to 2
percentage
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 points higher than the others. Following the data, if enterprises want to have more business opportunities in
clothing
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the clothing
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 trade, doing business in Italy will be a good choice.
Similarly
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, the business
about
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of
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diet
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 and
study
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are both
Verb problem
is
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 more
than
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popular than
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 others in Turkey.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, diet, study with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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