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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Today, many people do not know their neighbors in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

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 folks do not know
,
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 who lives
their
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next door,
this
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 causing
gradual
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a gradual
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 decline in
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socialising
. The crucial causes are economic reasons
as well as
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 rising
crimes
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crime
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.
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rates.
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both
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 the problems
along
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with
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their possible solutions. First of all, individuals think it is a
wastage
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waste
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 of time to
talking
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 unnecessarily with unknowns,
due to
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 different
belongings
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backgrounds
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, they
rather
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to
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do or learn some new skills which might help them better to grow financially.
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, the recent study by Times of India shows that 70% people
lives
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 in metro cities do not have
relif
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relief
 from their hectic
svhedule
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schedule
 to spend some quality time. So, governing bodies should focus on these and provide some financial relief to
thepublic
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the public
.
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,
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 incline in illegal activities in urban areas
also
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make
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makes
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 a full stop in the
brains
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brain
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. As
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 in newly developed buildings
folks
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, folks
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 belong to various
back grounds
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 which
echance
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enhances
 a level of insecurity between them.
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, they try not to bother each other.
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,
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Canada
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Canada,
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 people need to
take
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make
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 an
appointments
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appointment
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 to discuss any social issues in their
socities
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societies
. In conclusion, it is
undoughtedly
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undoubtedly
 true that social
interactins
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interactions
 are decreased
while
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 focusing on enhancing crime and
to maintain
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maintaining
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 economic
condition
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conditions
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.
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, officials
shold
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should
 take measures to provide proper rules and regulations.

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planning
Make a tight plan before you write. Say the two main ideas at once, then explain them with a short example.
language
Use clear and small words. Check spelling and make grammar right.
content
Show how the problem comes from a cause and how it hurts people. Then give a simple plan to fix it.
task response
The essay tries to cover both questions.
coherence
There are ideas and some examples.
cohesion
It shows aim to talk about life in town and safety.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sense of community
  • isolation
  • loneliness
  • support network
  • sense of security
  • trust
  • cooperation
  • social support
  • integration
  • community events
  • shared spaces
  • neighborly interactions
  • neighborhood watch programs
  • community engagement
  • technology
  • connect
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