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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compariosns where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compariosns where relevant.
This
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 graph provides the information about the visitors who
visits
Correct subject-verb agreement
visit
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 the
caribbean
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Caribbean
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island
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 between 2010 to 2017. The measurements are given in numbers.
Overall
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, it can be seen clearly that most of the tourists stayed on
cruise
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the cruise
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 ship
who
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that
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 came to visit the
Island
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.
On
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In
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 contrast,
lower
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a lower
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 quantity of visitors staying on
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island
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the island
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 over the years as compared to others.
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, at the beginning of the year 2010, there were only 0.5 million
,
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apply
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floks
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folks
 out of 40,00,000
,
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 who
staying
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were staying
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 on the ship. Since
then
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,
there
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their
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 numbers steadily increased and
reaching at
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reached
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 the point of 20,00,000 respectively.
Besides
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 that, the
numbers
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number
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 of visitors who
staying
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stayed
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 on
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island
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the island
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were
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grew from 500,000 to
1 500,000
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1,500,000
 in 2013,
then
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there
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their
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 proportion
were
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remained constant till 2015. After that, their rate
starting fluctuated
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started fluctuating
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 and reached again 15,00,000 in 2017. Eventually, the
quantity
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number
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 of individuals who stayed on
ship
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the ship
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 remained higher than others.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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