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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph provides data regarding the
stores
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 that opened and closed in one country from the years of 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, the difference between the
shops
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 that opened and closed during 2011 was around 2000
shops
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.
While
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 in 2018, the differences between were slightly above 2000
shops
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. It was clear that in 2011,
store
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 openings were relatively high, with figures being slightly less than 9000
stores
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.
Furthermore
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,
this
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 was the only period of
store
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 openings in the data that reached that high. Shockingly, it experienced a significant decrease in the next year, with the numbers barely touching 4000
shops
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.
Moreover
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, during 2015-2017, the figures of the
store
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 openings remained stable with approximately 4000
stores
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, but
then
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 went down slightly to 3000
stores
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 in 2018.
On the other hand
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,
store
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 closings started off strong with around 8000
stores
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, before going through a massive drop in 2015, with the numbers less than 1000
stores
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. But the numbers bounced back up in 2016 to around 5000
stores
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 and remained stable in the following years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words stores, shops, store with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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