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one long-distance flight consumed fluel which a car uses in several years' time, but they couse the same amount of pollution. so some people think that we should discourage non-essential flights, such as tourist travel, reather than to limit the use of cars . To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Introduction
There is a view that
,
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apply
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 it should be limited using
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airplanes
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aeroplanes
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due to
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 the pollution that
come
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comes
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 from
usage
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the usage
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 of
fuil
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fuel
.
Insead
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Instead
 of flying
individuals
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, individuals
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 can use their own cars that
needs
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need
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lees
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less
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fuil
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fuel
 and
give
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cause
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 less damage than
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airplanes
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aeroplanes
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.
While
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 some oppose
this
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 notice, I personally argue in favour.
Body · 1
One
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 main merit of
this
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 tendency of using
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airplanes
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aeroplanes
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 for visiting
the
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apply
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abroad is
hight
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high
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 speed.
That is
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 to say, by flying
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people
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, people
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 can save their
voluble
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valuable
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time
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 twice
reather
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rather
 than
use
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using
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 their own cars.
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, from Uzbekistan to France
through
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by
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airplane
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aeroplane
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 it
needs
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takes
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 about 6-8 hours
,
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;
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however
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, using a car could take
a
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apply
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several days
and
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or
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 even weeks.
Obviously
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Obviously,
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 cars may use less
fuil
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fuel
, yet to the same distance it might be similar
with
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to
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airplanes
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aeroplanes
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.
One
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 useful benefit is contains many
people
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 simultaneously.
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,it may give many
adventages
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advantages
than
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over
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 other transports . Without usage flying system
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people
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, people
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 may lose
their
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apply
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time
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 for
traveling
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travelling
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 or
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be force
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force
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forced
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 to still
at
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in
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hometown
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their hometown
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becouse
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because
 of the distance.
Thus
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 , just limiting
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aeroplanes
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airplanes
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airplanes,
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 we could not
red
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apply
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rid
of
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ourselves of
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enviranmental
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environmental
 problems.
Body · 2
One
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frimaty dimerit
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firm benefit
 of
this
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 trend is ideal for families
becouse
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because
 of affordability.
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,
traveling
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travelling
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 together is
friquently
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frequently
 more
cheaper
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apply
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enjoyable than buying multiple tickets.
For instance
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, when
a
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apply
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several
people
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 travel together, sharing
one
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vehicl
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vehicle
 helps to reduce the
overall
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 cost
compares
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compared
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 to buying separate tickets for
a
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apply
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public
transports
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transport
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.
Consequently
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, they can save
this
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 money and
spent
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spend
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 it for more
nessecary
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necessary
 sources
such
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 as food .
Therefore
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, flying might be faster , but entertaining is
one
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 of the main
role
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roles
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 during the visiting
time
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.
Conclusion
In
conclution
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conclusion
,
although
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 using
car
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a car
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offer
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offers
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 fun, it
also
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 comes with its
drawback
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drawbacks
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 of taking
long
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a long
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time
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.
Therefore
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,
stricing
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striking
 an intricate balance between the
teo
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two
 is
cricial
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critical
 to take
adventage
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advantage
 of each
simultaniously
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simultaneously
.

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structure
Plan your answer first. Make your view clear in the intro and restate it in the end.
ideas
Put one idea in each paragraph. Start with a short line that tells the point.
coherence
Link ideas with small words like 'also', 'but', 'however'.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Use short sentences.
examples
Give one good example and say how it helps your point.
content
You give a real example about time and distance.
endeavor
You show you care about the topic and give reasons.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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