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The map show the changes that taken placee since 1962 until today. describe it

The map show the changes that taken placee since 1962 until today. describe it
The three plans of
the
Correct article usage
a
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 certain region
depicts
Correct subject-verb agreement
depict
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 development over the periods between 1962 and 1985, and from 1985 to modern days.
Overall
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, as can be seen from the
map
Punctuation problem
map,
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 there
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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 been
expansion
Correct article usage
an expansion
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 of Fonton
an
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and
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 Meadowside village and
construction
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the construction
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 of several
building
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buildings
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 simultaneously with
appearance
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the appearance
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 of new roads. Over the first period of time, Fonton territory
expand
Wrong verb form
expanded
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 marginally to
western
Correct article usage
the western
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 side,
while
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 Meadowside village enlarged. Two main
road
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roads
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 were built from the western side to the east and
round
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a round
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 road,which goes through
village
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the village
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, to the north.
Moreover
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,
Leisure
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the Leisure
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 Complex and Superstore
erected
Verb problem
were erected
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nearby
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near
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 the north road, at the time when
Housing
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the Housing
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 estate was established.
Then
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, Fonton enlarged its domain to Meadowside suburbs,
while
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 Housting estate
steadely
Correct your spelling
steadily
 increased its
possesions
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possessions
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 to the left.
Business
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The business
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 park was
construct
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constructed
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 on the south route, parallel to
station
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the station
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 and hotel.
Furthermore
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,
railway
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the railway
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 was
develop
Wrong verb form
developed
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 to
eastern
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the eastern
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 and
north-estern
Correct your spelling
north-eastern
 direction.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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