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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

It is undeniable that all
vehicles
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such
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, such
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 as
cars
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, buses and
lorries
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lorries,
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 will be automated. In these
vehicles
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, only the travelling passengers, who will
inside
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be inside
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 them, there is no need
of
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for
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 drivers. In my point of view, there are more drawbacks than benefits related to these
vehicles
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 that will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. One of the main disadvantages of robot
cars
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 is
it
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that it
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 will increase the unemployment factor, as there are some organisations
,
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apply
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who
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that
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 always ask candidate before hiring for
driving
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a driving
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 license to
fullfill
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fulfil
 their work needs. But, with the availability of driverless
cars
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, those candidate will lose their jobs. In
this
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 way, these
cars
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 are becoming the reason for
lesser
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fewer
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 jobs for the qualified candidate, who even
have
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has
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G1
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a G1
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,G2 or AZ
Licenses
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License
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 as well. Another drawback is the safety issue, because
,
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apply
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 these driverless
cars
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 are often operated by
computer
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a computer
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 or AI. These
cars
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 cannot
cope-up
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cope
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 with the
unfamilier
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unfamiliar
 situations,
such
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 as worse
road
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roads
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, and bad weather conditions
like
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, like
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 human beings who can
co-operate
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cooperate
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 with the unseen situations.
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, autonomous
cars
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 could become the reason for
increasing
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an increasing
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 number of accidents and leave the passengers
in
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with
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 even in disabilities.
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, the main advantage of
robot
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a robot
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 car is that it will prove beneficial for those people who cannot drive
the
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a
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 car or
unable
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are unable
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 to drive it
due to
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 some disability. So, they not only go outside without the needs of other people for their basic shopping
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for
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, for
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 instance:
grocery
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groceries
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 and clothes , but
also
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 cover their long trips with their loved ones,
that
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which
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previously they
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they previously
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 denied
it
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because of
drivers
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the drivers
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.
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, these
vehicles
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also
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 have benefits for older people. In conclusion,
although
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 there are major negative impacts of driverless
cars
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 as they are becoming the reason for
lesser
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fewer
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 job opportunities and safety
,
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concerns, its
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its
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their
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 benefits cannot be overlooked.

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task response
State a clear view at the end. The essay should end with a firm yes or no about if the good side is bigger.
task response
Give one or two strong ideas with facts or simple examples to back them up.
coherence
Link ideas with simple joining words and keep each paragraph to one main idea.
grammar
Fix grammar and word use. Small mistakes can make meaning unclear.
content
You look at both sides and try to compare them.
structure
There is a simple plan: intro, body, and end.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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