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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as facebook)have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society?To what extent do you agree? In the current world, The usage of technology is constantly on the rise.

The study sets out its limitations clearly, as the authors used HERG-transfected cells only, so other currents may
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 play a part.
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, their protocol didn’t clearly
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 between open and inactivated block. They
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 omitted metabolites
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 as norcisapride, which may feed into the effect in vivo.
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, as they note, Cisapride links to 5-HT4 receptors in the right atrium, with no place in the ventricles and a limit to how far the results extend.

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Your view on the topic is not clear. Add a short line that shows your main view or what you think about the limits.
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Add a small intro to say what you will discuss and a short end to sum up.
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Give a wider view by saying why the limits matter and what more is done or needed.
coherence cohesion
Use simple link words to show how ideas go from one to the next, like 'first', 'next', 'also', 'but', 'so'.
coherence cohesion
Put ideas in a neat order: point, detail, result. End with a short line that sums up.
strength
It lists real limits with clear points.
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It uses real study details like cell type and drugs.
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It uses linking phrases to join ideas.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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