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it is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statment ?

The given proposal asks if individuals should save
money
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 for the future, for
me
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I
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 in
this
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a
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apply
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totally agree with the question.
First
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First,
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i
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I
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 totally agree with the question because
of
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apply
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maybe in the future you will face
emergency
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an emergency
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 situation that will cause you a lot of
money
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due
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to
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so
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that
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apply
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you must keep some
money
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 safe without using it for that kind of situations. Some examples of emergency problems that you might see
is
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are
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 someone who is near
from
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to
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you
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you,
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 like
family
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a family
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or
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member or
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 friend
or
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, or
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 even yourself gets
in
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into
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 a hard medical condition that will
ask for
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require
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 a lot of
money
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when
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. When
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 you
live
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face
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on
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one
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 of
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this type
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these types
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 of critical
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situations
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situation
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situation,
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 you will search everywhere for some
finance
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finances
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 to get the medicine. Spending
money
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for
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on
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 daily small
things
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 or
things
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 that are not necessary is a good feeling thing
but
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, but
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 it will not help you in the days you will face. Another reason for saving
money
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that is
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 you should save your income for the reason that if you want to buy something expeinceve in the next years or you want to change the life you are living now to another life in the future,
for example
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 if you planning to buy a car or a house these
things
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 will change the life you are living right now, for that purpose you must save your income as much as you can.
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to
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To
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 sum up, saving
money
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 will have a positive effect on your reaction when you face a critical situation.
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Also
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Also,
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 it will buy for you
things
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 that are more
expencieve
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expensive
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task management
State your view clearly in the intro and keep a clear plan in your essay.
coherence
Use simple links and short, clear sentences to link ideas.
evidence
Give one or two exact examples and explain how they help your point.
stance
You take a clear stance that saving money is good.
content
You give two main reasons that show why saving matters.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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