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Writing Samples
Band 3

Some say it is better to have vertical cities with lots of tall buildings rather than horizontal cities with fewer tall buildings. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued
wether
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 it is better to have vertical
cities
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 with tall
buildings
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 rather than horizontal
cities
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 with fewer tall
buildings
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 . I
am
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stongly
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strongly
 agree with the proposal that shares that having a numerous of tall
buildings
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 in vertical
cities
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 is better than having horizontal
cities
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 with fewer tall
buildings
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 . Surprisingly, many skyscrapers in
cities
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 are playing a pivotal role in tourism . Take America as an example , for decades , America has been the
dominated
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 country in terms of the number of tourists . The reason behind
that is
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 the
magnificant bulidings
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magnificent buildings
 which capture the attention of people .
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 , skyscrapers
often
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owining
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owned
 by the leading companies in the world . Being in
city
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a city
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that
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where
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 the leading companies
located
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are located
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in
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,
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apply
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will provide you with invaluable opportunities .
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 , many people migrate to
United
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the United
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 States to find better opportunities
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such
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, such
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 as being one of
the
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an
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employees
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employee
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 of
apple
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Apple
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 or
google
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Google
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.
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 , regions with several
skyscrpaers
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skyscrapers
 will be the strongest country in terms of
econonmy
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economy
. As a result , that will attract the
enterperuenrus
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entrepreneurs
,
busineessmen
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businessmen
, and several successful people . In conclusion , I
am
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firmly agree with the suggestion of having vertical
cities
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 with a lot of tall
buildings
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is
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are
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 better than horizontal
cities
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 with fewer tall
buildings
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 , since
its
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they
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 enhance
its
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their
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 beauty and it is not only attract
a
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humans across the world , it
also
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 attract
the
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apply
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enterpernuers
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entrepreneurs
 and
the
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apply
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busniessmen
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businessmen
.

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structure
Make a clear plan in the intro. Say what you think and what you will show in the writing.
structure
Give two or three main ideas in the body and put a new idea in a new paragraph.
content
Use examples that fit the idea. Tie the example to the point you make.
grammar
Fix big word errors like wether, stongly, bulidings. Check spelling and cap rules.
style
Use small link words to join ideas, like also, but, for example.
conclusion
End with a short restate of your view in the last line.
style
Keep one idea per sentence and short lines per paragraph.
content
The writer shows a clear view on the topic.
content
There are some specific examples used.
structure
Some effort is seen to argue for vertical cities.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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