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Research says more and more business training and business meetings are taking place online. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent years, the phenomenon of remote training and
meetings
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 in companies has become increasingly prevalent.
While
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 some people argue that online commercial activities offer numerous benefits, others contend that it has several drawbacks.
This
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 essay will elaborate on the main
advantages
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 and
disadvantages
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 of online
meetings
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 and training, and present my perspective.
To begin
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 with, there are several clear benefits associated with the remote activities that enterprises hold. From
employees
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' views, remote working is more flexible and comfortable, which enables them to work in various places. Cadence, Synopsys, and some big companies have announced the remote working principles to allow their
employees
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 to have online business training and
meetings
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, enabling them to work at home if there is heavy rain outside or any other inconvenient circumstances.
Moreover
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, from the companies’ perspective, international
meetings
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 or training are easier to conduct if they’re online, which makes the information exchange much simpler.
For instance
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, Google had launched an international tutoring program within the company, training its
employees
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 all over the world from its headquarters in America. Despite these
advantages
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, remote activities
also
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 bring about some notable
disadvantages
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. A management problem arises when the training and
meetings
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 are taking place online, which requires the
employees
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 to be more self-disciplined, or it will be hard to control.
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, workers might not pay that much attention if the meeting is held online,
while
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 losing connection is a frequent excuse for not participating seriously in the meeting. In conclusion,
while
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 remote training or
meetings
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 offer several
advantages
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,
such
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 as flexibility for the
employees
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 and making the corporation more international, they
also
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 have certain
disadvantages
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, like company management. In my opinion, the
advantages
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 still outweigh the
disadvantages
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, where the potential benefits are tremendous.

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task response
State your view clearly in the first paragraph and keep it through the essay.
coherence
Put one main idea in each body paragraph and explain with a simple example.
coherence
Use simple linking words like first, also, then, but to join ideas.
grammar
Break long sentences. Use short, clear sentences to avoid mistakes.
examples
Choose one or two clear examples that fit the point and explain them.
structure
Clear structure with introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence
Good use of linking words such as Moreover and For instance.
content
Shows a view that benefits can be large overall.
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