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The pie charts show the proportion of housing owned and rented in the UK in 1991 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the proportion of housing owned and rented in the UK in 1991 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts accentuate
the
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the percentage of housing owned and rented in the United
KIngdom
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Kingdom
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inbeetween
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between
 the
year
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years
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 1991 and 2007
focusing
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, focusing
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 on four distinct forms of the two things showcased.
Firstly
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, the most evident and most noteworthy change is the rise in percentage that can be recorded in the
home owner
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homeowner
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 area marked with green
the
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, the
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 number jumping from 60% to a whopping 70%,
whereas
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 the biggest drop is seen in social renting from 23% to a measly 17%. Another key detail is the fact that private renting has not shown any shift in numbers throughout these 16 years compared to the other 3 sections on the chart.
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,
scocial
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social
 housing has
also
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 known a slight downfall peaking at 6% in 1991 and falling to only 2% in 2007. As a whole
the
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, the
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 two
piecharts
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pie charts
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 showcase the major changes in 4 forms of housing and renting in a span of 16 years
marking
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, marking
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 the growth in the home owner area, the
steadiliness
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steadiness
 in private renting and the drops in
scocial
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social
 housing and social renting.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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